Reflection on Project 2

In this post, I will be answering questions that reflect on my final draft for project 2.

Pasternak, Leonid. "Throes of Creation". via Wikipedia. Public Domain License.

1. Specifically, I changed my entire introduction and conclusion in order to better address my audience and avoid summarizing my rhetorical analysis. I also deleted unnecessary sentences and condensed many of them down because my essay was really wordy in my first draft. Throughout the essay, I also had to add in sentences here and there to address my audience again.

2. I didn't have to reconsider my thesis, because it was pretty solid. However, in the middle of huge paragraphs I tended to stray away from the main point causing it to be a little confusing to read and not very organized. To fix this, I just kept reading my essay out loud and went from there revising.

3. Remembering the real purpose of my essay and who my audience is led me to these changes.

4. These changes I made would hopefully make me more credible of an author because I was addressing my own audience more, connecting with them.

5. The changes better addressed the audience because I was speaking/writing directly to them. I used words like 'you' and 'we' to make it perfectly obvious what I was doing.

6. My sentence structure didn't really vary. It was long sentence after long sentence which can be difficult to read. I broke up those sentences to fix this issue.

7. Like I said, bad sentence structure makes the reader not want to read anymore. So, by fixing that issue, I would be making it easier for them to read and understand what my point is in the essay. Also, the changes would allow them to get through reading the essay faster giving them more time to think about it and also easier for them to look back on to reference when they eventually rhetorically analyze a piece of writing.

8. No, I didn't have to reconsider conventions of a formal essay, I know them well enough by now.

9. The reflection helps me see what I still need to work on as a writer. No one is perfect so by recognizing and being aware of these imperfections, I'm already one step closer to correcting them.


Reflection:
I read Hunter's reflection as well as Jon's and I related a lot to what both of them were saying. Hunter worked a lot on his intro and conclusion which I can definitely relate to. Jon worked really hard to address his audience in a more obvious, direct fashion which is something I struggled to do at first as well. The class discussions were what brought on these specific revisions in my opinion. If we didn't talk about it all together, I probably wouldn't have revised my essay in the way that I did.